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Angels mourn
Angels cry
Angels wither
Angels die

Angels hear
Angels see
What can happen
What could be

Angels sit
Angels walk
Angels whisper
Angels talk

About what they see
What they hear
About the ending
Which comes near

Angels mourn
Angels cry
Angels wither
Angels die
Something different. I had the first 8 lines in my head and it wouldn't go, so I decided to make it something bigger, so it would feel more finished.
In my head it needs to be spoken, so spoken word.

edit: I made 'about what they hear' into 'what they hear'
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Tarisha Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the rythm!
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martine8719 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010
Thank you!! It's good to hear you like it!! :rose::hug:
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DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Professional Writer
Great job, i like this a lot. :blackrose:
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martine8719 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010
Thank you :D I'm glad you like it!! :hug::heart:
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DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010  Professional Writer
You are quite welcome:rose: :heart:
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anticonformity7 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2008
pretty cool! i like it.
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martine8719 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2008
Thank you so much!!
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Guere Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2008
That's pretty good! :D I actually read it out loud to hear what it sounds like, and that really made a lot of difference! I'm glad you expanded beyond the first eight lines though, because otherwise it might have been a bit too small/simple. But this I like... great job! :aww:
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martine8719 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2008
Thanks, yeah the first eight lines wouldn't have been enough. Glad you like it! :rose:
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jdrainville Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this very much. Good job!
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